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Initial feedback[edit source]

Hi Team,

This page needs significantly more background. Make sure to cover who, what, why, when and where. For example, include more background on CCAT, Humboldt State University, your team, the semester, etc. More importantly what is the current state and history of the existing compost. Images would really help here.

Thanks, --Lonny (talk) 16:11, 24 January 2017 (PST)


Hello,

This is a good start but needs some editing and additions. The first few paragraphs especially should be free of grammatical and spelling errors. This is the first impression your reader gets of you and you want it to be good. Please re-read your first few paragraphs out loud and check for errors or strange wording. Your writing needs to be professional. You need more information in your background section.

I would recommend expanding your material's section and the pros and cons of the various material options. Also, you should have a client section and information on what is there and how the current system is working

Good start but needs quite a bit of work.

Rebecca Stark (grader)

Criteria[edit source]

Hello Team, Your criteria is pretty good. Your materials used criteria is not clear, what do you mean by appropriate technology techniques? Have someone not in your group read over you criteria and see if they understand them. Your constraints should also state whether more or less is better, for example for cost less is better.

Rebecca Stark (grader)

Optional Draft Feedback[edit source]

Hello, Team,

It looks you guys have a lot more work to do. You currently have a lot of elements missing. Be sure to go back and make sure you have at least added in all the sections even if they are blank. In general avoid saying "our" and use the instead, for example the project not our project. It helps it sound more professional by distancing yourselves. Check you Lit review to be sure every section has a source. Avoid your opinion in the lit review. You should move your criteria into the problem statement section. I would also add a quick sentence at the top of the lit review to just say what it is. In general more pictures is better. Some of your pictures are very small, try to make them larger. I think you need to step of the work at this point to finish. Keep working hard.

Rebecca Stark (grader)