Hola Phil,
very impressive page and i did find the grammatical error i was tellin u about haha but i changed it already... i bolded the sentences that i thought need to be looked over... they were a little run on and i didnt want to move it around and change the meaning... maybe move the "Notes" part of it down so its not the first thing someone sees when they come to your page... you could put more pictures if you wanted... and lets find out how to use one source multiple times tomoro in class...
Kalewa
Notes from the presentation[edit source]
Here are a few notes from my suggestions during class:
- Cite source on second generation, thin film solar cell
- Cite source on "Dye-sensitized solar cells are one of the most promising types of thin-film solar cells."
- Make it clear that durable refers to the physical structure, not its ability to produce electrical energy.
- Please specify electrical power or electrical energy instead of just electricity.
- "Because of the problems with crystalline silicon cells"... make it more clear which problems you are referring to.
- any pictures of the german plant?
- I showed how to make multiple references to the same source. You can see it at https://www.appropedia.org/w/index.php?title=Dye-sensitized_solar_cell&diff=131380&oldid=131110.
- The page should have some mention of electrical current to give context to your mention of electrical energy (especially in light of voltage).
Let me know if these notes don't make sense and thanks! --Lonny 09:52, 18 June 2010 (UTC)