1 - Okay first of all, it would be very useful to explain in your introduction that you are trying to prove that silicon anodes are better, I didn't really know what was going on till like halfway down the page. Also remember that lots of people will read only the introduction at first and then judge if the article is worth reading. They can't know that it's worth it unless they know that you are trying to improve the batteries by using silicon. (I know that it says it in title but it will seriously make your article stronger)

2 - I am huge fan of numbers, I know that you said that the specific capacity is 4200Ah/g and that is so much bigger then carbon and I get that because i am an engineer but your average reader may not know what Ah/g is, maybe send a wiki link to show what that are or perhaps be like, your every day laptop battery could then last for like three days!!! SWEEEEEEET

3 - Your missing two sections but you obviously know that, just thought that I would mention it!!

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