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= Nathan's Comments<br> = 1. Who do you feel is the target audience for the writing in this document? Suggest a change if you think the writing is not appropriate for this audience. Arcata Community members and people looking for information about functioning greywater systems.<br>2. Is the information presented easy to navigate? Can you find the necessary information easily? How would you improve the layout? Yes the page is laid out very well<br>3. Are headings used successfully? Are enough headings used? If so, are they specific enough? Are the headings in logical order? If not, would the document be easier to follow with more headings? Level two headings? If so, suggest some headings. Maybe some level two headings could be nice, to break up some of the text.<br>4. Is there a clear topic sentence for each paragraph? Do all following sentences relate to that topic sentence? How could topic sentences of the paragraphs be improved? Suggest improvements for specific paragraphs.The topic sentences work for explaining the paragraph<br>5. Is the writing objective? Remember this is a technical communication. Make suggestions to avoid bias or opinion insentences. (For example: eliminate adjectives/adverbs: very, many, large, etc) The writing is objective<br>6. Is each figure or photograph easy to understand? How could the figures be improved? Can you suggest another figure presents the information in a clearer manner? I wish there was a figure that showed visually how a grey water system worked<br> 7. Does the writer refer to the figure(s) in the text using figure numbers? Is each figure well described in the text and are the sources cited? Do the figures have captions? make suggestions to better incorporate figures Yes there is figure numbers<br>8. If this is a RCEA page have the writer clearly presented the bottom line (predicted money and carbon dioxide emissions saved versus actual money and carbon dioxide<br>emissions saved) in a table or graphical format? Suggest improvements to make this comparison easier for the reader to understand. N/A<br>9. Are there any questions you have about the topic that are not addressed? Are the sources of the information clearly presented under “References”? How is the grey watere system functioning now and what are any future plans for it 10. Does the author provide links to related sites? Are there enough or too many? Are they technical enough or too technical for the audience of the document? Is the relevance of each site clear? Is there asummary of references? Maybe more links would be nice 11. Is the document too long or short? (It should be between 2-3 pages). If it is too long, what should be taken out? If it is too short what remains to be addressed? The document seems a little long maybe try to trim some of the nonessential explanations 12. Does the page have the “ENGR 115: In Progress” banner? Does the page have the correct categories (ENGR 115 and RCEA if applicable) at the end of page?<br>yup 13. List the strengths of document - (Be sure to address how the Appropedia page looks at this time.)<br>The document is very well done, but all text.<br>14. List areas for improvement – (Be sure to address how the Appropedia page looks at this time.)<br>Not a lot, but it does seem long, some more visual aids would be nice.<br>15. Overall comments – (Any feedback for the authors)<br>Very good job.<br>
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