Talk:Zane Middle School concession cart

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I am being redirected to get here please fix that. Send Camille a link directly to your page. You guys do not have a lot on here yet so I do not have that many comments. The first if to add a statement like "this section is being worked on" to any section that is not completed yet. The section heading should be all capitalized not half and half, be consistent with capitalization and formatting Don't forget to add all your names and links to your personal appropedia pages at the bottom of the page with a link to it at the beginning of the page, something like "the group members (link)" . Try to add to your background and abstract a bit more detail. Remember not to talk about anything till it is described. Your pictures all need a reference ( if it is your picture state that). Do not just say intro to design, say Engineering 215: Intro to Engineering Design at Humboldt State University. Your abstract needs to start a little slower, you get right into the project, add the purpose and who you guys are first. Consider making your constraint table like your cost table, I think it would look better. In the constrain table "must last many years" is not a constraint, be more specific, how many years. "Bernie Levy at Zane Middle School in Eureka has employed our project design project group" is a strange sentence to start a background with. Problem statement and criteria section seems to be a different font then the rest of the page. Finally try to remember that this is being written for someone who has no idea about this project, this class, or anything about your topic. Really try to keep up on this page so you are not stuck doing a lot at the end of the semester.