Susie Slack-Edit Comments 04/26/10[edit source]

CHECK LIST RESPONSE TO INCLUDE ON APPROPEDIA 1. What is the most important strength of this document?

You have strong and interesting intro paragraph.

2. What is the most important aspect to change? The methodology and results of the Huntzinger process is confusing.

Is this cradle to grave or still cradle to gate? What are the 4 products? How were the scores developed?

3. How could the navigation of the document be improved?

The document was fairly navigation friendly. I think this is fine.

4. Do you have suggestions for improving the headings used in the document?

ou have clear descriptive headings. I think it is fine.

5. Are there any topic sentences that should be improved?

Possibly the carbon sequestration paragraph. Also, the Huntzinger paragraph in the Method section & the first paragraph in the Results section.

6. Do all figures have captions, figure numbers and are they referred to in the text?

Yes, nice formatting.

7. Is there at least one reference per author? Are the references cited properly and do they use the format described here? https://www.appropedia.org/Help:Footnotes 4

References-ok, good formatting.

8. Are tables included as text whenever possible? (Appropedia can search text in tables – so Lonny prefers tables to be text rather than images). This page contains information on how to make tables https://www.appropedia.org/Help:Table_examples

Good use of Tables.

9. Should the document be shortened or lengthened? If so, what suggestions do you have.

Could add some suggestions in #10, but good length I think.

10. Any other questions or comments for the authors?

- I like how you averaged the results, interesting. - What is Winter Smog? -Could explain the scoring process used for Table 2 a little. - I was a little disappointed the second have of the LCA was not included. This was the half I was most interested in. Plus, it sounds like the Huntzinger method did cradle to grave.

Susie Slack- End Edit Comments 04/26/10

Thanks Susie for the helpful comments! -Adam

links[edit source]

here are the links to LCAs

http://www.utexas.edu/research/ctr/pdf_reports/1739_1.pdf

http://www.sciencedirect.com/science?_ob=ArticleURL&_udi=B6TWG-4N3P07T-4&_user=10&_coverDate=05%2F31%2F2007&_rdoc=1&_fmt=high&_orig=search&_sort=d&_docanchor=&view=c&_searchStrId=1221735579&_rerunOrigin=google&_acct=C000050221&_version=1&_urlVersion=0&_userid=10&md5=f4fa25256adbc9370da45905c2267bda

http://www.sciencedirect.com/science?_ob=ArticleURL&_udi=B6VFX-4SWP1TT-1&_user=10&_coverDate=05%2F31%2F2009&_rdoc=1&_fmt=high&_orig=search&_sort=d&_docanchor=&view=c&_searchStrId=1221735434&_rerunOrigin=google&_acct=C000050221&_version=1&_urlVersion=0&_userid=10&md5=7aade0dcd278941f7be755d6c56b31ab


this last one isn't an LCA but it may be useful http://www.sciencedirect.com/science?_ob=ArticleURL&_udi=B6TWF-4V99T6H-2&_user=10&_coverDate=09%2F30%2F2009&_rdoc=1&_fmt=high&_orig=search&_sort=d&_docanchor=&view=c&_searchStrId=1221736954&_rerunOrigin=google&_acct=C000050221&_version=1&_urlVersion=0&_userid=10&md5=79ebd1f759339775b3aabbfc1a293a89

Eco-cement[edit source]

Eco-cement isn't even mentioned, see wikipedia on cement

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